Tuesday, 22 September 2015

Egg Race Recount

Walt:  think about my purpose and reader by planning my recount
My Recount Rubric
Recount Writing

Write for my reader
I've tried to think about my reader
My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
I tried to meet the purpose
My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics
My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.
On the twenty first of September our crazy literacy teacher gave us a fragile little friend, which was a egg. It was me and Sulieti that took care of this egg. And the eggs name was Kong Hong. And yes it may be a funny name and it is a city's name. (We played the egg race)

So straight after Mr Goodwin told us everything we need to do, we got into groups of two and I was with Sulieti. After we got our egg we got markers and started to draw on it’s face. We lined up quietly in the porch and walked not quite silent but we still made it to our location where there egg race happened.

The game began and it was me that went first then Sulieti went, but before that he handed us a spoon.
“Three,Two,One,Go” yelled Mr Goodwin, Then I raced across the platform and down to the bark. It was very difficult to balance and run at the same time. Once I passed it to Sulieti she power walked through those monkey bars and sprinted while she was on the ground, and they both got there safe and sound.

As we were walking back to class the egg was lying on the palms of my soft hands. Did I tell you how relieved I was to see that the egg was not cracked like Talita's egg. But as we got near class the egg slipped out of my hands and I just, just caught it with my fingers. Just thinking about that moment gave me shivers.

It was fun doing that, yes I would do that again some other time soon. I think that it will be very fun for some little kids to do this activity. The egg race was difficult and fun at the same time.
Description of learning: What I have learnt from this writing activity was how to think about my purpose and reader by planning my recount. And yes it is just like the walt. It was a very fun experience to do this game.

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